The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar graph elaborates the proportion of male and female in Australia who engaged in physical exercises in percentage in the year of 2010.

In general, it is obvious that more females were into physical activities than their male counterparts throughout the year. This is because apart from 15-24 grouping, the percentages of women are higher than those of men in the rest of the groups. As for the male, 15-29 years old males were the most active in Sports as it reached its peak at 52.08%, which was the highest percentage for both genders. However, this figure witnessed a gradual decline up to 39.5% in 35-44 group groups. There was a steady increase later on, yet, the number of females outnumbered in the figure. Meanwhile, more women got involved in exercising after their 30s since the percentages were the highest, ranging from 50% to 53%, prior to the 60s group.

Conversely, these are the age groups where men become less active that the percentages were around 40.1% to 45%. As for the last age grouping (65-above), the gap between the male and female was substantially narrowed just by one percent difference (46.7 in male, 47.1 in female)

To sum up, Australia men were most active in their 20s and their physical engagement was lessened in their 50s where the opposite trend was applicable for the women counterparts. But in the end of day, they became equally interested in physical activity as in the last age groups.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, however, if, while, apart from, as for, in general, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 5.60731707317 268% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1197.0 965.302439024 124% => OK
No of words: 247.0 196.424390244 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84615384615 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57444041448 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 106.607317073 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 361.8 283.868780488 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.0326685406 43.030603864 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.7 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7 22.9334400587 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 5.23603664747 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241440926299 0.215688989381 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990831385079 0.103423049105 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609467957735 0.0843802449381 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161699360992 0.15604864568 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261569093407 0.0819641961636 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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