the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity divided by age in 2010.

As can be seen from the chart, the number of females involved in excercise was higher than that of males except for the young at the age of 15 to 24. While men at 35 to 64 years old took the most physical activity, it was women at the age of 15 to 24 took the largest amount.

In particular, men taking exercise recorded a steady increase till they reached 54 and started to drop with an insignificant amount of 0,3% at 55 to 64 and 6% at 65 and over. On the other hand, the amount of excercise that women got involved in seems to have a substantial fluctuation. At the age of 15 to 24, women took the most excercise with 52,8% and began to plunge dramatically to to 42, 2% till the age of 34. It continued to have a slight decrease of 2,7% till the age of 44. However, the convey experienced a moderate rise at the age of 45 to 65 and over from 43,1% to 46,7% in women's activity.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, while, except for, in particular, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 33.7804878049 145% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 820.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 195.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.20512820513 4.92477711251 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52310819243 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548717948718 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.0376910239 43.030603864 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.5 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.375 22.9334400587 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.23603664747 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235757814458 0.215688989381 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125257376788 0.103423049105 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166152189905 0.0843802449381 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256202927459 0.15604864568 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.21438217991 0.0819641961636 262% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.43 11.4140731707 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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