The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity: 2010

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity: 2010

The bar graph makes a comparison between the rate of workout done by Australian men and women at various ages in the year 2010.

Overall, the number of male working out seems to have decreased with an increase in age, while that of a female shows a rise in the trend. Both the genders have slight fluctuations in the workout rate with rising age. Although, the number of young male working out outweighs the female of the same age, however, at older ages the latter outraces the former.

The percentage of male doing physical workouts, during the ages fifteen to twenty four years, is noticed to be at 52.8%, which is about 5% higher than that of the female. Then, a drastic fall of about 10% is noticed in the age groups of 25 to 34 years, after which it hits its lowest point at 39.5% during the ages 35 to 44 years. However, the figure shows a gradual rise to 43.1% in the ages 45 to 54 years. It continues to go up steadily reaching 41.1% in the ages 55 to 64 years and reaches its highest level of 46.7% at the ages 65 years and above.

One the other hand, the number of physically active female is shown to be less than 50% during the teenage and early twenties, as compared to the male gender that accounts for more than half. However, a gradual rise in the trend is seen as the age increases. It rises to 48.9% at the age of twenty five to thirty four years and keeps on rising to more than 50% at the ages of 35 to 44 years, hitting its highest point of 53.3% during the subsequent ages of 45 to 54 years. Onwards, a slight dip of 0.3% is seen during the ages fifty five to sixty four years after which it drops to its lowest percentage of 47.1% at the age of sixty five years and older, leading the male by a minor difference of 0.4%.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 33.7804878049 213% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1418.0 965.302439024 147% => OK
No of words: 336.0 196.424390244 171% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.22023809524 4.92477711251 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 3.73543355544 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.1412609796 2.65546596893 81% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 106.607317073 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46130952381 0.547539520022 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 422.1 283.868780488 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.3903512589 43.030603864 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.166666667 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 22.9334400587 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.23603664747 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174746350236 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07602915388 0.103423049105 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486460564715 0.0843802449381 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130608624417 0.15604864568 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564479066003 0.0819641961636 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.44 61.2550243902 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.49 11.4140731707 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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