The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011.*includes French, German and Spanish

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011.
*includes French, German and Spanish

The given bar chart compares the data about the proportion of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, from 2010 to 2011.

Overall, girls outstripped boys nearly in all subjects over the term in the question. Another notable feature was that Foreign languages, Mathematics and Computer Science were the most favourite subjects for both genders, compared to other courses.

As regards Computer Science, the net percentage stood at 56.3 for girls, which was much higher than the boys, at 42.1%. Also, the figure 56.3% was the highest for the mentioned period. Next, with respect to Foreign languages and Mathematics, females were just ahead of their counterparts by only 1%. The proportion for both courses remained at approximately 47%. Likewise, the difference was marginal for Physics and History, just 2% more as opposed to the boys in both texts.

If we look at Chemistry, the percentage achieved by females was 30.2%, almost two times the boys, at 14.1%. However, Geography was the only exception for boys where they surpassed their correspondents at 30.4% for the former and 20.1% for the later respectively.

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Average: 7.9 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, likewise, look, so, as regards, with respect to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 979.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 186.0 196.424390244 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26344086022 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68122219893 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655913978495 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 274.5 283.868780488 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7115254635 43.030603864 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.23603664747 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160455906401 0.215688989381 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688543140155 0.103423049105 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14040389226 0.0843802449381 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148343752841 0.15604864568 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.196385319983 0.0819641961636 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.2329268293 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 11.4140731707 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 40.7170731707 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

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2. in the second paragraph summary, put 'There were significant differences in chemistry and geography.'

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 10
No. of Words: 186 200
No. of Characters: 927 1000
No. of Different Words: 117 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.693 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.984 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.622 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 63 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 54 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 33 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.463 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.616 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4