The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
The given bar chart compares the shares of expenditures for five major groups in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
Overall, it can be seen that Housing, Food and Transportation had the highest expenditure, while the least expenditure on Clothing and Health care.
As regards Housing, the United States headed the list with just over a quarter (26%), followed by the UK at about 23%. Next came Japan at approximately 22%, which was slightly higher than Canada at 21%. With respect to Food, even though Japan ranked third in Housing, it was in the first place at about 23%. Next on the list was the UK, exactly a one fifth (20%), whereas Canada was just ahead of the US at 15% vs 14% respectively. Regarding the Transportation, Canada stood at 20%, making it two times more than Japan at 10%, which was also the lowest total. Second and third rank were the US and the UK at 17% vs 15%.
In contrast, Clothing and Health care were not as popular as Housing and Transportation. Regarding the Clothing, the difference was a bit with 7%, 6%, 4% and 3% correspondingly for Canada, the UK, Japan and the US. As for Health Care, the US began at 8% vs the UK at 2%, but Canada and Japan maintained at around 4% each.
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for five major groups
for five major categories
while the least expenditure on Clothing and Health care.
while the least expenditure is on Clothing and Health care.
flaws:
doesn't need those transition words, like: 'with regards, Regarding...'. They are duplicated.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 227 200
No. of Characters: 961 1000
No. of Different Words: 120 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.882 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.233 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.609 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 57 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 33 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 20 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 13 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.396 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.402 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.62 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, third, whereas, while, as for, as regards, in contrast, with respect to, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1027.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 227.0 196.424390244 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52422907489 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62029009109 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 106.607317073 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563876651982 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 295.2 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.7834906594 43.030603864 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3636363636 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6363636364 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3636363636 5.23603664747 236% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231165038826 0.215688989381 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107920780072 0.103423049105 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.20277619467 0.0843802449381 240% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234787775013 0.15604864568 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.293656765059 0.0819641961636 358% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.2329268293 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 61.2550243902 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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