The bar chart shows British Emigration selected to destinations between 2004 and 2007 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting and make comparisons where relevant

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The bar chart shows British Emigration selected to destinations between 2004 and 2007.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart demonstrates the selected destinations by the British Emigration from 2004 to 2007.The five destinations were Australia, Spain, New Zealand, USA and France.

It is evident that, in the year 2004, Australia, where is over 40 thousand people selected as their main destination. Spain was the second highest place that around 35 thousand British people selected by 2004, while other three countries were selected by a few of people nearly 25 thousand people as equally.

According to the chart, Australia remained their most popular destination, by nearly 40 thousand people in 2005. Although USA and New zealand were not popular among British people.France and Spain were selected as their second highest destination at just 35 thousand people in 2005.In the year 2006, there was a massive increase of British Emigration over 50 thousand people who selected Australia again compared to other four countries. Simultaneously, where the highest number of British people selected to Australia in 2007 around 45 thousand.

To sum up, Australia was the major destination where the number of British Emigration selected to, whereas Spain was the second major place that selected. New Zealand, USA and France were less popular than others.

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Australia, where is over 40 thousand people selected as their main destination.
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the second highest place that around 35 thousand British people selected by 2004
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the second major place that selected.
the second major place that is selected.
the second major place selected.

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