The bar graph below shows the entrolment of students in music in an Australian university from 2000 ta 2006 and the pir chart shows how they choose their career after their course

Essay topics:

The bar graph below shows the entrolment of students in music in an Australian university from 2000 ta 2006 and the pir chart shows how they choose their career after their course

A statistical analysis of the proportion of students enrolled in music and their career preferences in a university in Australia from 2000 to 2006 is made in the given charts.

The bar graph, which is given first, shows that female students had a significant affinity towards music over this period, in which their enrolment rate in music ranged from 20 to 50%. This was progressive in nature throughout the period, whereas the male students had never shown an enrolment rate over 20 during this period. From 2000, when the male and female ratio remained the same, the rate fluctuated between 10 and 15 for males, in which the year 2004 witnessed the minimum. On the other hand, the maximum rate recorded for females was in 2006 (50%).
The pie chart, which follows, shows the post course career preference of these students. When only a fifth of the total chose the same profession, a quarter of them chose similar ones. It is interesting to note that those who had opted a different profession were over the half of the total.

Overall, it is clear from the charts that, when more female students opted music at the university, the career choice of most course completed students was not preferably the same.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (2 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, whereas, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1009.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 209.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82775119617 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47182794317 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 106.607317073 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55980861244 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 301.5 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7158172923 43.030603864 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.111111111 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2222222222 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253343403822 0.215688989381 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101692229967 0.103423049105 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933950233417 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161957548218 0.15604864568 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063475402545 0.0819641961636 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, whereas, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1009.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 209.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82775119617 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47182794317 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 106.607317073 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55980861244 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 301.5 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7158172923 43.030603864 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.111111111 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2222222222 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253343403822 0.215688989381 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101692229967 0.103423049105 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933950233417 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161957548218 0.15604864568 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063475402545 0.0819641961636 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.