The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in New Zealand in 2002.

Essay topics:

The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in New Zealand in 2002.

The bar chart provides the proportion of boys and girls who participated in different sport activities in New Zealand in 2002.
Overall, it is clear that there were significant differences between the percentage of boys and girls who took part in most of these sports. It had, however, the similar proportion of those who played basketball and tennis.
For girls, the highest was 27% of netball and the slightly lower was those who enjoyed swimming with 23% approximately. There were roughly 7% and 8% of girls played basketball and tennis respectively as well as the figures which were slightly lower than boys for both sports. While there were 5% for girls participated in athletics and 6% for soccer, less than 5% took part in cricket and marital arts. Lastly, among other sports totalled around 10% for girls participation.
By contrast, among boys, the sport with the highest participation was soccer with 25% . Only 1% and nearly 14%, 4% those enjoyed netball, swimming and athletics respectively, the figures which were lower than girls for these sports. It was 11% of those played cricket .There were 8% and 9% participated in basketball and tennis ,respectively, which were slightly higher than girls for both sports. Finally, it was approximately 18% of boys played other activities.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, lastly, so, well, while, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1086.0 965.302439024 113% => OK
No of words: 212.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12264150943 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81862232253 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495283018868 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 304.2 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8857275179 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7272727273 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2727272727 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18181818182 5.23603664747 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0991729016469 0.215688989381 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493503004858 0.103423049105 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639093211321 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956167475917 0.15604864568 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084878290995 0.0819641961636 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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