The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.

Essay topics:

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.

The amount of yearly selling and rentals four different film form (rentals, VHS, DVD, Blu-Ray) in particular movie store from 2002 to 2011 is illustrated by the graph. Overall, it can be seen that rentals and VHS sales witnessed downward trend, while the amount of DVD selling declined at the same time of Blu-Ray format was reported.

The number of rentals stood at approximately 180 thousand, while the amount of VHS selling roughly 90 thousand. During the period, both of those movie format experienced a decrease trend. While the VHS decrease more than 8 times from initial period in 2005 (end of reported-year), the number that of rentals decline to approximately 65,000 at the end of the period.

Moving to DVD sales, it initially stood at almost 50 thousand in 2002 and saw sharply increase during the five-year period and it reached the perks of selling in 2007 accounted more than 200 thousand. At the same time, the number of Blu-ray selling stood as much as 3 thousand. From 2008, the number of DVD sales declined slowly, however the selling of Blu-Ray observed an incline as much as number that of DVD sales decline. At the end of the period, DVD sales 180,000 while Blu-ray increased to approximately 15,000.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: BLU_RAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Blu-ray'?
Suggestion: Blu-ray
... different film form rentals, VHS, DVD, Blu-Ray in particular movie store from 2002 to ...
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Line 1, column 305, Rule ID: BLU_RAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Blu-ray'?
Suggestion: Blu-ray
...VD selling declined at the same time of Blu-Ray format was reported. The number of r...
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Line 3, column 140, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this movie' or 'those movies'?
Suggestion: this movie; those movies
...90 thousand. During the period, both of those movie format experienced a decrease trend. Wh...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mately 65,000 at the end of the period. Moving to DVD sales, it initially stood ...
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Line 5, column 354, Rule ID: BLU_RAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Blu-ray'?
Suggestion: Blu-ray
...declined slowly, however the selling of Blu-Ray observed an incline as much as number t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, while, in particular

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1015.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 209.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85645933014 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57062063987 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497607655502 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 283.5 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8797458831 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.777777778 112.824112599 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2222222222 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.23603664747 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174647774495 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846887705899 0.103423049105 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647577132986 0.0843802449381 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135053526957 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504503182288 0.0819641961636 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.2329268293 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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