The charts below show how selected age groups purchased concert cinema and theatre tickets online over the first three months of 2006 in three countries and how the internet was accessed

The bar charts depict mode of buying online tickets to theatre, concert or cinema by three countries namely Australia, UK and Malaysia within age groups of 25 to 44 and 65 plus. Along with another graph illustrating the means by which the tickets were bought like desktop, laptop or mobile phone.
All the three countries used online services to purchase tickets, with Australia and UK individuals in younger age groups using the online services proportionately higher compared to Malaysians. The most common way to buy tickets was seen by accessing desktops in all three countries, with lowest mode being mobile phones.
First graph details about 55% of individuals in Australia and UK bought online tickets compared to only about 40 % Malaysians in age groups 25 to 44. However, individuals 65 plus were buying tickets online more than 40% in Malaysia but lower compared to Australians at 45 %.
Second bar graph shows Malaysia ranking highest in desktop usage to purchase, whilst only half of them use mobile phones. Similar trend is seen in UK and Australia, where the graph is lowered to half from desktop usage to laptop and halved to mobile phones. However among the laptop users, UK scores the least with only 30% opting this mode to buy tickets, with Australia and Malaysia using 10%more compared to UK.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (3 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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... with lowest mode being mobile phones. First graph details about 55% of individ...
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...lower compared to Australians at 45 %. Second bar graph shows Malaysia ranking ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, second

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1097.0 965.302439024 114% => OK
No of words: 219.0 196.424390244 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00913242009 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.515869657 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 106.607317073 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534246575342 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 327.6 283.868780488 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.2327437673 43.030603864 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 121.888888889 112.824112599 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 22.9334400587 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173821163251 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814184700266 0.103423049105 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808313156683 0.0843802449381 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12754321622 0.15604864568 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771734597898 0.0819641961636 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.2329268293 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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