The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960 2010

Essay topics:

The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.

The pie charts compare the proportions of population employed in three different sectors in town A and town B in 1960 and in 2010.

It is noticeable that working in the manufacturing industry was less common in both towns between 1960 and 2010, while the opposite trend was true for jobs in the service industry. However, manufacturing jobs were still the most popular choices in town B in both years.

In 1960, most of the people had manufacturing jobs, with 41% in town A and 70% in town B. People who worked in the sales industry accounted for 20% of the town B population, and this figure for town A was 10% higher. Similarly, nearly one-third of the inhabitants in town A had service-related jobs, but that only accounted for 10% of people in town B.

In 2010, the figures for sales and manufacturing halved to 16% and 20% respectively in town A while that for services increased by 35%. In town B, the percentage of workers for the service field inclined by 15%, whereas only an increase of 2% was seen in the sales sector. Furthermore, over half of the inhabitants of town B had manufacturing jobs.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, similarly, still, third, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 921.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 198.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65151515152 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89593070559 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489898989899 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 264.6 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.6054138679 43.030603864 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.333333333 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 22.9334400587 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77777777778 5.23603664747 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.410777408278 0.215688989381 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.198335017267 0.103423049105 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107290967063 0.0843802449381 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284256581602 0.15604864568 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111580325901 0.0819641961636 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 61.2550243902 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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