The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

Essay topics:

The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

The pictures illustrate three different stages in the development of West Park Secondary School in 1950, 1980 and 2010.
Overall, the school has experienced significant changes with the disappearance of houses and farm area to make way for the construction and expansion of the school building, parking, and recreational areas. The only thing that remains unchanged is the main road.

In 1950, the school was built close to the main road and next to a number of houses in the left. Located behind the houses was farmland, while a playground was introduced to the right-hand side of it. By 1980, the houses had been demolished in order to build a small car park and a science block, which was situated right next to the main building. Also, the farmland had been turned into a sports field.

In 2010, the parking space was extended to cover the entire sports field, which was then narrowed and relocated behind the main building. As a result, the playground was reduced in size to provide space for the sports field, which occupied one-third of the playground area.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d had been turned into a sports field. In 2010, the parking space was extended ...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, so, then, third, while, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 892.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9010989011 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60710667074 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554945054945 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 248.4 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5645599103 43.030603864 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1111111111 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.23603664747 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130118898058 0.215688989381 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566611063717 0.103423049105 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672049493764 0.0843802449381 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099383862568 0.15604864568 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720659882667 0.0819641961636 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.2329268293 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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