Many people are now spending more and more time travelling to work or school, some people believe that this has negative development while others think there are some benefits.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, some people think that they derive great benefits from the time they spend on commuting from home to work, while others take a dim view (ý em là view không rõ rang?) of having spent so much time moving. In my opinion, I am in favor of the idea that transporting long commuting time does bring more negative effects on some aspects of people's lives.
On the one hand, it is indisputable that time would be a convincing reason why people should travel to work. Obviously, spending time to work presents people with new challenges in life (2 câu này không rõ rang lắm. Câu 1 từ “time” ở đây phải cụ thể hơn, câu 2 “spending time to work” là dành thời gian để làm việc, thì có ý nghĩa gì trong bài vì bài này là thời gian để đi (travelling to) làm/ học . Specifically, the ability to cope with unexpected situations could be strengthened. Many bad things could happen during the time they commute to school such as accidents or even get stuck in traffic jams, which result in a efficient time management. For example, in a research conducted by American Psychological Institution has proved that people spend more time traveling have a tendency to use their time more effectively.
On the other hand, in our fast-paced society, people are extremely busy with piling up on their desks so they could be forgiven for thinking that (IELTS academic không dùng ngôn ngữ như báo/blog như thế này) traveling to work is a wasteful use of time. This amount of time could be used to have rests and therefore ensure improve/enhance their quality of performance. People don’t have to wake up at the crack of dawn in order to prepare and then travel an enormous distance to their workplaces, which uses up a considerable amount of their energy. It can easily be seen that these long-distance travelers/commuters’ productivity seems to be less higher??? compared to those who live near their schools or offices.among the people not. Furthermore, their health would be negatively affected. When the rate of vehicles is on the rise, which also meaning that the gradual deterioration of the environment. To be more specific, the air in many cities is not fresh enough to breathe. For example, a report from an Australia hospital in 2017, claimed that the patients who are more likely to suffer from respiratory diseases due to prolonged exposure to polluted air. Mệnh đề còn lại của câu này đâu?
In conclusion, in spite of the aforementioned detriments to the environment and people’s productivity, I believe that the disadvantages outweigh its advantages
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...à thời gian để đi travelling to làm/ học . Specifically, the ability to cope with ...
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Suggestion: an
... stuck in traffic jams, which result in a efficient time management. For example,...
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Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'less high'?
Suggestion: less high
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Suggestion: Compared
...productivity seems to be less higher??? compared to those who live near their schools or...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2229.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 440.0 315.596192385 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06590909091 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05541398668 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 176.041082164 153% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611363636364 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9856335541 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.45 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30616949118 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847886066764 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727922258357 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190538082884 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0907434506667 0.056905535591 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.