The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The map illustrates west park secondary school at three different stages in its development over the period from 1950 to 2010. As we can see that, even though there were changes happened, the main road and the school stayed unchanged.
In 1950, the school was built near to the main road and next to a several number of houses. A large areas behind the school was turned into playground, while the area behind the houses was farmland.

It is noticeable that the several houses has demolished in order to make way for a small car park and an additional school building, gained area as a science block in 1980, which has cover a half of land next to a car park. On the other hand, the school also gained the farmland and transformed into a sport field. What is remarkable is the car park extended to cover almost entire area of a land by replacing a sport field in 2010, however playing ground area diminished by sharing less than a half of land with a sport field.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...over the period from 1950 to 2010. As we can see that, even though there were cha...
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...ilt near to the main road and next to a several number of houses. A large areas behind the sch...
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...e area behind the houses was farmland. It is noticeable that the several houses...
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...land by replacing a sport field in 2010, however playing ground area diminished b...
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...than a half of land with a sport field.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, second, so, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 793.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 177.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4802259887 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36201439556 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593220338983 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 228.6 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6707136997 43.030603864 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.285714286 112.824112599 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2857142857 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 5.23603664747 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153929730185 0.215688989381 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769153714068 0.103423049105 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596935993056 0.0843802449381 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11355293441 0.15604864568 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679822543128 0.0819641961636 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 61.2550243902 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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