The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the mail features and make comparisons where relevant. H.H

Essay topics:

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the mail features and make comparisons where relevant. H.H

The diagram demonstrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. The process can be separated into 3 sections.
On the first section, the shape of bricks is made. By using digger, people collect clay which is a main ingredient of bricks. Then metal grid is excepted from the clay. After that, the rest of clay is mixed with sand and water. Finally, by wire cutter or mould, the brick's shape is made.
on the second section, bricks become hard enough to be used on building. After the shape of brick is made, bricks are dried up by dying open. Then bricks are put in kiln, and they are burned at moderate temperature. Besides, they are burned more at high temperature. At last they are put in cooling chamber and are made 50 cool that they can be packaged and delivered.
On the third section, bricks are packaged and delivered.
From this diagram, it can be found that there are many steps for the production of bricks.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 2, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...r or mould, the bricks shape is made. on the second section, bricks become hard ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, second, then, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 7.0 271% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 787.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 171.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60233918129 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37460027073 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 236.7 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 22.4926829268 53% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 18.3414329665 43.030603864 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 56.2142857143 112.824112599 50% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.2142857143 22.9334400587 53% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.14285714286 5.23603664747 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.09268292683 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174167167324 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707449379095 0.103423049105 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112984162777 0.0843802449381 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119154330838 0.15604864568 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113342755326 0.0819641961636 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.3 13.2329268293 48% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 61.2550243902 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.51 11.4140731707 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 11.4329268293 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.9970731707 62% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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