The diagrams below are existing and proposed floor plans for the redevelopment of an art gallery

The first diagram shows an art gallery’s floor layout as it is now, and the second diagram illustrates its proposed redevelopment plan for the future.

It is clear that the main changes were made to the location of the entrance and the use of space.

According to the proposed plan, the entrance of the gallery will be moved to the Parkinson Court side of the gallery; therefore, visitors can enter straight into the exhibition area without having to walk through the lobby. The lobby and the office will no longer be present as these areas will be transformed into areas used for education and storing purposes.

In terms of the exhibition space, the permanent exhibition will merge together with the two existing temporary exhibition, thus making it become larger in size. There is also a plan to expand the gallery towards the west by erecting a special exhibition and its designated store on the piece of land which is not a part of the existing gallery on the first diagram.

Votes
Average: 9.2 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: larger
...orary exhibition, thus making it become larger in size. There is also a plan to expand the gal...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, second, so, therefore, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 830.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 170.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88235294118 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62735147602 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605882352941 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 260.1 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.6039528037 43.030603864 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.333333333 112.824112599 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3333333333 22.9334400587 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.23603664747 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265959550892 0.215688989381 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118663806611 0.103423049105 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1466314779 0.0843802449381 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154570768917 0.15604864568 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.166173562264 0.0819641961636 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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