The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen mary hospital since its construction in 1969 .

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen mary hospital since its construction in 1969 .

the diagrams depict the modification that have replaced at Queen mary hospital between 1960 and 2000.From the overall analysis, it is manifest that there were a lot of changes have come over the 8 decades.

At the first glance, it is evident that in the initial year, the hospital and shopping center were built close to the main road. In the 1980 year, the hospital were remained unchange, while, in this year, the shopping center was demolished. Furthermore, the shopping center was converted into two parts that were cancer center and pharmacy. The are park had not replaced which was behind the hospital, whereas, the farmland was changed into nursing school,which was beside the car park.

Furthemore, in the cultimate year,the hospital and pharmacy remaind same, while, the car park was converted into two parts that were nursing school and car park, which were behind the hospital. Furthermore,the cancer center was extended in the cultimate year.hence the capacity of the car park has been reduced by a half.the hospital had not changed over the period.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, if, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.0 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 897.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 175.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12571428571 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57618607517 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.547539520022 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 268.2 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.33902439024 254% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7169912449 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.142857143 112.824112599 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 22.9334400587 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.23603664747 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122887637796 0.215688989381 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068944884003 0.103423049105 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835900499583 0.0843802449381 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121965580038 0.15604864568 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101947943233 0.0819641961636 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.2329268293 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 11.4140731707 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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