The diagrams below show the development of the village of Kelsbey between 1780 and 2000

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the development of the village of Kelsbey between 1780 and 2000.

The three diagrams highlight the changes that had happened in the village of Kelsbey over 220 year period.

Overall, there was a drastic development that happened between 1780 and 2000. This includes more residential area, roads and bridge which make the town accessible, schools, shops and, wetland for birds.

To begin with, during 1780, there are only 100 homes in Kelsbey. People there have a huge farm and wide forest. On top of that, there is a river further on the west side of the town just over the farm which runs along from north to south of the area. In 1860, there are three major changes that occured In Kelsbey. First, they build a bridge over the river, then they took off some of the farmland to be able to build a road to access the village easier. Finally, parts of the woods were deforestred to accommodate an increase of 100 more homes in the residential area.

In year 2000, the change that took place was even more extreme. At this time, forest and farmland were completely exploited by the towns' people in order to build more homes, which increased substantially to 500, and to build new school. Furthermore, they made another road to have a way in to school from the village. In addition to that, shops are built along side of the river near the bridge on the western side of the school. Lastly, a wetland for the birds was also made by the end of the river on the southern part of the town.

Votes
Average: 8.2 (6 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...idge over the river, then they took off some of the farmland to be able to build a road to ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 356, Rule ID: ALONG_SIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'alongside'?
Suggestion: alongside
...e. In addition to that, shops are built along side of the river near the bridge on the wes...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, lastly, so, then, in addition, to begin with, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 33.7804878049 145% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1168.0 965.302439024 121% => OK
No of words: 258.0 196.424390244 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52713178295 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24333906444 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 106.607317073 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523255813953 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 346.5 283.868780488 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.8117385785 43.030603864 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4285714286 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 22.9334400587 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78571428571 5.23603664747 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143307205759 0.215688989381 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562272013843 0.103423049105 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887942910327 0.0843802449381 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107387325067 0.15604864568 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617207937355 0.0819641961636 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.2329268293 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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