The diagrams below show how fish pies are made.

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show how fish pies are made.

The diagram illustrates the process of fish pies manufacture.

It is clear that there are several stages of the process, beginning with raw ingredients preparation and ending with the finished product. To produce fish pies, four different ingredients are mixed together.

Firstly, it takes more than 1 month to deliver potatoes to the factory. These potatoes are cleaned and peeled after that, those potatoes skin is put into a waste disposal. After peeling, they are sliced into pieces and boiled until they are cooked. Next, they are mixed with chilli and the mixture is then stored for the next step. To prepare fish, the delivered fresh salmon is added some lemonade juice and salt, after that, the mix is put in a steam oven. The whole preparation process took nearly 12 hours or less. Skin and bones are totally removed by the workers and the resulting ingredient is inspected by one person.

Prepared salmon is one of the four ingredients that are used to make fish pies, along with potato, pea and sauce. All four different components are blended together and the mix is wrapped before freezing. Finally, the finished product is stored or dispatched for sale on the market.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'ingredients'' or 'ingredient's'?
Suggestion: ingredients'; ingredient's
...ages of the process, beginning with raw ingredients preparation and ending with the finishe...
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Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and ending with the finished product. To produce fish pies, four different ingred...
^^
Line 5, column 514, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...aration process took nearly 12 hours or less. Skin and bones are totally removed by ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 7.0 257% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 993.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 200.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.965 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43802686614 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 106.607317073 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 308.7 283.868780488 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.0165130568 43.030603864 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.3846153846 112.824112599 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3846153846 22.9334400587 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.84615384615 5.23603664747 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0817567954847 0.215688989381 38% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0369978463509 0.103423049105 36% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810517164174 0.0843802449381 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0993676935745 0.15604864568 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118468761848 0.0819641961636 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.3012195122 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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