The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where releva

The diagrams reveals the information about procedure of cement manufacturing and the way it is used in making concrete for constructional purpose.
It can be seen that cement production requires four stages. At the first stage, two elements clay and limestone , both are crushed together by the crusher to convert then into the powdered form. Nextly, both elements mixed together with the help of mixture and it is mixed with very good way, which thereby send the powder to the rotator .After that,it is rotating heater tube, heat is introduce from the end is actually dropped on the grinder which will change the powder into cement, which is packed then into the bags .

The second diagram show that in the concrete production there are main four main elements; cement(15%), water(10%), sand(25%) ,and small stones(50%)respectively. These substance get mixed in concrete mixer for producing concrete and that concrete mixer start with clock wise.

Overall, it is clearly seen that the steps of making cement are more complicated , and required advanced machinery . While, concrete production requires mixing of four components in the right proportion in a simple machine .

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: reveal
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...t stage, two elements clay and limestone , both are crushed together by the crushe...
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...nd the powder to the rotator .After that,it is rotating heater tube, heat is introd...
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Line 2, column 387, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
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...ment, which is packed then into the bags . The second diagram show that in the...
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...n elements; cement15%, water10%, sand25% ,and small stones50%respectively. These s...
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...ted , and required advanced machinery . While, concrete production requires mixing of...
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...the right proportion in a simple machine .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, second, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 982.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 186.0 196.424390244 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27956989247 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83903872733 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623655913978 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 296.1 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.1905275288 43.030603864 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.75 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.23603664747 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 1.69756097561 943% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214415282974 0.215688989381 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996141973217 0.103423049105 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0891341836786 0.0843802449381 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153298593116 0.15604864568 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0990288124527 0.0819641961636 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.2329268293 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 11.4140731707 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.