Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree with this statement, because some advertisements are very harmful, especially for children between two and five years old. Children are so curious about everything. Their brains have an extraordinary capacity to absorb information from the environment. If you teach the wrong content correctly, they will accept it as the correct content without any questions. Research shows, advertisements for young children increase materialism. Advertisements are restricting creativeness and cause problems in the family. Advertisements also have unfavorable effects on children's mental health. Children may think that everything they see is real on TV. Advertisement designers generally use colorful things and exaggerated expressions to enter their minds. Especially children under five years old are open to all incoming codes. Whenever we turn on the TV, we often encounter food commercials. It is not a coincidence, because according to the research children generally love food commercials.
Another example, children cannot pay for anything and buy something for themselves, but if they say to you to buy them anything and even if you don't want to buy, you can't resist their insistence for long. They will always impress the kids even though it doesn't affect us. The only goal of the advertiser is to impress children and create a sense of desire in them.
Advertising is part of the capitalist system. Twenty-five European countries have laws about protecting children from advertisements. It is forbidden to broadcast advertisements before children's programs and between certain hours. In Denmark, for example, if you want to advertise candy, you have to put toothbrush pictures in your advertisement. Most of the advertisement contents unhealthy foods. According to research, only 4% of the commercial breaks convey messages about healthy foods. 96% of advertisements include unhealthy foods which have lots of calories, and they are too harmful to children, so that's why obesity is increasing. These reasons prove that Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 5.60731707317 535% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 965.302439024 187% => OK
No of words: 324.0 196.424390244 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55864197531 4.92477711251 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 3.73543355544 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16348690016 2.65546596893 119% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 106.607317073 186% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 283.868780488 191% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 1.53170731707 653% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 8.94146341463 257% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7288147601 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.3043478261 112.824112599 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0869565217 22.9334400587 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.52173913043 5.23603664747 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.13902439024 615% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26811032336 0.215688989381 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738784636438 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0915398717835 0.0843802449381 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172789311284 0.15604864568 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789798092174 0.0819641961636 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.2329268293 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 61.2550243902 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 11.4140731707 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 40.7170731707 206% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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