The figures below show the changing trends in leisure in Europe for cinema industries

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The figures below show the changing trends in leisure in Europe for cinema industries

The graph illustrates the differences between two different forms of selling music included internet sales and album sales during an 11-year period from 2013 to 2024.
As can be seen, in 2013, people purchased much less albums on the internet, accounting for less than 500 million dollars, while it was much higher for album sales at about 2000 million dollars. From 2013 onwards, album sales have increased steadily until 2010, when it will start to decrease dramatically to just under 500 million dollars in 2014. During the same period, it is expected that sales on the internet will show a much better result. While it have experienced a sudden fall from 2015 to 2016,it is anticipated that there will be a dramatic increase from just under 500 million in 2016,reaching a peak at 8000 million in 2024.
From the bar chart we can see that, there are two estimates for the total number of cinema attendances from 2013 2018.It is noticeable that , the number of attendance rose from just 900 million in 2015,leaping to approximately 1200 million of attendance in 2015.On the other hand, while the number of attendance have decreased from 1200 million to just below 100 million, from first estimate it is predicted that cinema will experience a dramatic reduction from just 900 million attendance, bottoming out to under 400 million in 2013.

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Average: 8.4 (3 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun albums is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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...l be a dramatic increase from just under 500 million in 2016,reaching a peak at 8...
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Suggestion: It
...er of cinema attendances from 2013 2018.It is noticeable that , the number of atte...
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Suggestion: ,
...ces from 2013 2018.It is noticeable that , the number of attendance rose from just...
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...tely 1200 million of attendance in 2015.On the other hand, while the number of att...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'if', 'while', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.156626506024 0.268076937826 58% => OK
Verbs: 0.132530120482 0.116061578633 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0682730923695 0.0759168565197 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0481927710843 0.0366838410393 131% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0281124497992 0.0131127313244 214% => OK
Prepositions: 0.184738955823 0.155750635184 119% => OK
Participles: 0.0481927710843 0.0379272487307 127% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.61451636557 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0281124497992 0.0210936926555 133% => OK
Particles: 0.00401606425703 0.00175180941692 229% => OK
Determiners: 0.0682730923695 0.0948980150116 72% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0240963855422 0.00437022459523 551% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00401606425703 0.00967000014798 42% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1350.0 1161.00487805 116% => OK
No of words: 226.0 196.9 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.97345132743 5.90752243213 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.73763899035 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.314159292035 0.337110787985 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.256637168142 0.247514529752 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.172566371681 0.171178102325 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110619469027 0.112407865282 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61451636557 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 106.607317073 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548672566372 0.546246751206 100% => OK
Word variations: 51.6124928101 49.3433353143 105% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 8.93414634146 67% => OK
Sentence length: 37.6666666667 23.0094962315 164% => OK
Sentence length SD: 144.998180065 42.9750493124 337% => OK
Chars per sentence: 225.0 135.714022679 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.6666666667 23.0094962315 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.689975730869 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.84146341463 78% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.48048780488 338% => OK
Readability: 63.3303834808 47.7609492067 133% => OK
Elegance: 1.86538461538 2.94281807926 63% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211575681783 0.418131533498 51% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.166711749894 0.181151798455 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.103353123176 0.0850326197045 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.708852079408 0.706616315825 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.219230270631 0.157042692854 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117010597757 0.228904883108 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486963194947 0.108899403657 45% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.300510552766 0.367819155151 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.106021140627 0.0812612215331 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148747990534 0.316326947829 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412357090642 0.0921553760075 45% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70731707317 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.14146341463 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.08536585366 49% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.16585365854 126% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 0.956097560976 0% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 3.02926829268 66% => OK
Total topic words: 6.0 7.1512195122 84% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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