The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The two pie charts illustrate a formal Australian household use in power and their resulting emissions of greenhouse gas.

It's obvious that most of Australians use a large amount of warming up of energy usage. And water heating contributes to the largest proportion of greenhouse gas.

Interestingly, while water heating is not the most energy use but the second one , with 30%, it creates most proportion of gas which strengthens the greenhouse effect, with 32% of emissions. By contrast, heating takes up the largest percentage of energy use, with 42% despite only 15% carbon dioxide is generated from it.

Other appliances accounts for less than 20% , but this use makes up more than a quarter of the profile of greenhouse gas emissions, with 14%. This situation suits refrigeration, with 7% of energy use but double its figure for polluted gas emission.
Cooling and light usage take up the negligible shares in profile of the energy use, and they also produce less percentage of greenhouse gas, with 3% and 8% respectively.

Votes
Average: 8.5 (4 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 81, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Line 7, column 44, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...er appliances accounts for less than 20% , but this use makes up more than a quart...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, second, so, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 869.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 170.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11176470588 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87401663292 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605882352941 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9203111444 43.030603864 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.625 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.23603664747 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337414426142 0.215688989381 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15910808869 0.103423049105 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700180922391 0.0843802449381 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203196928169 0.15604864568 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630857089312 0.0819641961636 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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