The given pie chart show the pattern of expenditure on music in two different years in England

Essay topics:

The given pie chart show the pattern of expenditure on music in two different years in England

The provided pie charts depict the information on the ways of outlays on music in two different years in England.The calibration of data is done in percentage.

Now,turning to the details.It is implicit in the first chart that the expenses done on CDs were 61% in 2005 and its half of money was spent on concerts.Afterwards,digital downloads required only 6% expenditures and noticeably, on other sources of music outlays were decreased with just 2% in the given time period.

further moving to the latter chart,it is crystal clear that in 2008,a small amount of money had been spent on other sources of music with 3% .Amazingly,more than five of two fifth expenses reported to do on cds.Simultaneously,expenses on digital downloads comprised of 27% and for concerts the proportion of outlays was a quarter.

In conclusion,it is apparent that maximum outlays were done for CDs and the amount of money spent for other sources of music had least position

Votes
Average: 6.9 (15 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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... on CDs were 61% in 2005 and its half of money was spent on concerts.Afterwards,d...
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...ts half of money was spent on concerts.Afterwards,digital downloads required only 6% expe...
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... money spent for other sources of music had least position
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 810.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 158.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12658227848 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.71106341471 2.65546596893 140% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550632911392 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 235.8 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.4926829268 173% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.0998693379 43.030603864 200% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 202.5 112.824112599 179% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.5 22.9334400587 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 1.69756097561 1001% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206770439773 0.215688989381 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142577873264 0.103423049105 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122892726668 0.0843802449381 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142577873264 0.15604864568 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122892726668 0.0819641961636 150% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.5 13.2329268293 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.35 61.2550243902 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 10.3012195122 168% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 11.4140731707 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.4329268293 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.9970731707 160% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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