The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. Summarize the information and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

Essay topics:

The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. Summarize the information and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

Given is a graph revealing some striking similarities in the fertility of China and the USA during a period from 1920 to 2000. It is evident that both rates fluctuated over the timescale, with lows during the 1940s and highs during the 1950.

Increasing from approximately 10 percent in 1920, Chinese birth rate rose dramatically to 15 percent in 1930. After that, it plunged to a low of 5 percent in 1940 and remained unchanged in the next five years. However, the fertility of China reached its peak of 20 percent in 1950, then it was followed by a sharp fall. The latter half of century brough a sustained decline in the figure.

The USA's birth rate fluctuated from 1920 to 1950 before experiencing an abrupt decrease to less than 5 percent in 1945. This was followed byan exponential growth to the peak of 15 percent in 1950. The next fifty years saw a steady decline in the rate.

In conclusion, the fertility of two countries appears comparable until 1950, its gap widened as the fertility of China slid away.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 845.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 180.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69444444444 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62261649578 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588888888889 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.3969260359 43.030603864 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.5 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.23603664747 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145233612039 0.215688989381 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562258246863 0.103423049105 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566961606345 0.0843802449381 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0890056852627 0.15604864568 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03069434478 0.0819641961636 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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