The graph below shows cinema attendance by age group in Great Britain

Essay topics:

The graph below shows cinema attendance by age group in Great Britain.

the graph represent information about the attendance of cinema by groups of age in create Britain from 1984 to 2000.
overall, there was an upward trend in term of attendance to cinema by age groups over the time, it seem some fluctuation in each group.

firstly, it is clear that group of age 15-24 years old increase slightly by 35%,it first have in amount of 18% in 1984 then reach a percentage of about 33% and we have two fluctuations and remain steadily of about 38% finally there was a dramatically rise to about 59% .

secondly ,concerning the last age group 35 and over steadily trend of rate people going to cinema in the period of time 1984 to 2000 .
the group of people 7-14 old have a first overage of one to ten wichis more important than the other age group 25-35 old by 1989.the lines reach the some amount in thrice time respectively 15% in 1991, one third in 1997 and 32% in 2000.

in conclusion, despite the attendance of age 15-24 went to cinema have many fluctuate but it maintain the most important percentage over the time.

Votes
Average: 9.2 (7 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, then, third, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 873.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 190.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59473684211 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45916630485 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542105263158 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.5170915203 43.030603864 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.5 112.824112599 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6666666667 22.9334400587 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 5.23603664747 248% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 20.0 1.69756097561 1178% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274986259813 0.215688989381 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175764814016 0.103423049105 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112207429094 0.0843802449381 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175764814016 0.15604864568 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112207429094 0.0819641961636 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.2329268293 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 61.2550243902 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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