The graph below shows the number of University graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007.
do you think it is better for student to work before their University study. Why use reasons and specific examples to support your choice
The provided line graph illustrates, that information about the number of males and females who University graduates between 1992 and 2007 in Canada.
The number of males graduates in 1992 was 70,0000 , then it throws at approximately 7 6,0000 in 1994. However, from 1996 to 1998 it declined at almost 7200000. After that, in 2008 few fluctuated and from 2002 to 2006 increased at the number of 95000.
As per as, from 1992 to mid 1994 and 1996 the number of female graduates was rose at 400000, whereas, it dropout at 100000 in 1998 being higher than it was continued at almost 149000 .
Overall, it can be seen that the number of women who were graduates was the highest as compared to the males graduates in Canada University.
It is believed by some individuals that, it is beneficial for scholars to work before their University academics. But I believe that, it is the right because there are several reasons about this and I will give some stable examples to support my view.
To commence with, in contemporary Era education is play a significant role in everyone's life. Because it is beneficial for individuals. first of all there are various factors why student work before their University study. because when student complete their academic and before their study of University students should part time jobs such as accountant waiters and so on. Due to the fact that, they easily manage their expenditures as well as their financial expenses.
For example, they can earn money easily and also gain some knowledge of work and apart from that, they gain experience. Consequently, student should work before their higher study.
Furthermore, strengthening of my new point scholars also obtain was information apart from their studies, secondly they also learn the value of time as a result they become a punctual and discipline. To epitome, in foreign country's mostly students do part time jobs because their higher studies, with this, they can easily balance their time and expenditures so it's a beneficial for scholars to do work before their higher study.
To recapitulate, in my opinion it is very important and the better for scholars that they do work before their higher study because the gain work experience as well as manage their expenses which are later to their financial and economics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, whereas, apart from, for example, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.0 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 6.8 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.15609756098 380% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 47.0 5.60731707317 838% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 33.7804878049 169% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 965.302439024 201% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 387.0 196.424390244 197% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0180878553 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 3.73543355544 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67531826141 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 106.607317073 176% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485788113695 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 283.868780488 207% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 1.53170731707 653% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 3.36585365854 327% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 8.94146341463 201% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5530277203 43.030603864 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.888888889 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3888888889 5.23603664747 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 3.83414634146 235% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 3.70975609756 377% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327241811018 0.215688989381 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10641783694 0.103423049105 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709892684765 0.0843802449381 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143547461776 0.15604864568 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546558942893 0.0819641961636 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.2329268293 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 40.7170731707 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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