The graph below shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the same featured, and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics: The graph below shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the same featured, and make comparisons where relevant

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The graphs shows increasing the proportion of population aged 65 and over according to the year between 1940 and 2040 in Japan , Sweden and U.S.A.

In 1940, the ratio of population aged 65 and over were 5% in Japan, 7% in Sweden and 9% in USA. The proportion of community aged 65 and over were 3% in 1960 in Japan, 8% in Sweden and 10% in USA.

In 1980, the population aged 65 and over were 3% in Japan, 8% in Sweden and 10% in USA.
The ratio of Japan were decreased from 5% in 1940 to 3% in 1990. After 1990 it will gradually increases upto 27% in 2040.

In 2010, The population were 8% in Japan, 15% in USA and 18% in Sweden After 2020 in 2040 the population of USA will 24% and Sweden will 25% and Japan will 27%. It is high populated country.

In the end, the ratio of 65 and over aged people live in Japan will 27% This country is highly populated of 65 and over aged people as compare to the Sweden is on 2nd highly populated and USA is 3rd highly populated over age country.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 12, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'show'.
Suggestion: show
The graphs shows increasing the proportion of population...
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Line 2, column 127, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... the year between 1940 and 2040 in Japan , Sweden and U.S.A. In 1940, the ratio...
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Line 7, column 65, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ecreased from 5% in 1940 to 3% in 1990. After 1990 it will gradually increases upto 2...
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Line 7, column 94, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'increase'
Suggestion: increase
...% in 1990. After 1990 it will gradually increases upto 27% in 2040. In 2010, The popul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 6.8 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 805.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 194.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.14948453608 4.92477711251 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19200627708 2.65546596893 83% => OK
Unique words: 72.0 106.607317073 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.371134020619 0.547539520022 68% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 232.2 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.6614921261 43.030603864 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.625 112.824112599 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 22.9334400587 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.0 5.23603664747 0% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231755546992 0.215688989381 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126865383971 0.103423049105 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094927463423 0.0843802449381 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168437766332 0.15604864568 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102396253379 0.0819641961636 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.2329268293 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.96 61.2550243902 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.09 11.4140731707 62% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.45 8.06136585366 80% => OK
difficult_words: 20.0 40.7170731707 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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