The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given graph compares the population of people aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries, USA, Sweden, and Japan.

From the graph, we can see that the percentage of population aged 65 and over has increased from 1940 to 2040 in all the 3 countries, crossing 20 % by 2040. A consistent increase cannot be observed for the 3 countries. In Japan, the population aged 65 and over was below 5 percent up to 2000, but they managed to rise it above 25 percent by 2040. In 1940, the highest percentage of population aged 65 and above was in USA, with nearly 10 percent. However, in 2040 USA is the country with least population aged 65 and over. Thus we can conclude that Japan is the country which has made better progress to attain highest percentage of population aged 65 and over in 100 years.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 484, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the least'.
Suggestion: with the least
...nt. However, in 2040 USA is the country with least population aged 65 and over. Thus we ca...
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Line 3, column 524, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...with least population aged 65 and over. Thus we can conclude that Japan is the count...
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Line 3, column 605, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'attain the highest'.
Suggestion: attain the highest
...untry which has made better progress to attain highest percentage of population aged 65 and ov...
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Line 3, column 676, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pulation aged 65 and over in 100 years.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 674.0 965.302439024 70% => OK
No of words: 149.0 196.424390244 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52348993289 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49378814695 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52081115693 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55033557047 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 194.4 283.868780488 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0853187507 43.030603864 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2857142857 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.14285714286 5.23603664747 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339222306153 0.215688989381 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180329024353 0.103423049105 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101429507844 0.0843802449381 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.32585258614 0.15604864568 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054091786489 0.0819641961636 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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