The graph below shows US consumers'average annual expenditures on cell phone and residental phone services between 2000 and 2011.

Essay topics:

The graph below shows US consumers'average annual expenditures on cell phone and residental phone services between 2000 and 2011.

The line graph compares the average yearly that US people spending on cell phone and landline phone services over a period of 10 years.
Overall, it is clear that the trend of using landline phone services was dropped significantly. By contrast, consumers spent budget on cell phone services was dramatic risen at the same time. It is noticeable that in 2007, expenditure on mobile phone services overtook that for residential phone services.
As can seen that the amount of money was spent on residential phone services decreased sharply. In 2001, there was nearly $700 sent on landline services. This amount was significant higher than that of money consumed on handset services. However, this figure was went down and hit a low of only $400.
Turning to the remaining cell phone, we can see that even not many people spent money on it at first. But this trend become popular. More and more consumers expenditure money on cell phone services throughout the period shown. And mobile phone services surpassed that of residential phone services in 2007. This amount continuous claimed and reached its peak of nearly $800 at the end of the time.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 306, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ok that for residential phone services. As can seen that the amount of money was s...
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Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'see' or 'be seen'?
Suggestion: see; be seen
...for residential phone services. As can seen that the amount of money was spent on r...
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Line 4, column 147, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'consumers'' or 'consumer's'?
Suggestion: consumers'; consumer's
...his trend become popular. More and more consumers expenditure money on cell phone service...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 18.0 5.60731707317 321% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 949.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 192.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94270833333 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54080735986 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520833333333 0.547539520022 95% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.5414734091 43.030603864 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.0 112.824112599 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7692307692 22.9334400587 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.76923076923 5.23603664747 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317337562889 0.215688989381 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125733608497 0.103423049105 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10964879066 0.0843802449381 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229137370585 0.15604864568 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0968379179898 0.0819641961636 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.78 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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