The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and a plan for changes to the school site in 2024

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and a plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The two pictures illustrate some changes to the layout of school as it was 2004 with a proposed site design in 2024.
Overall, school site experienced considerable changes during the period shown . The most noticeable differences between two pictures are the accommodations will be able to have a larger number of students and a new school building.
As can see from the map, in 2004, the school building 1 and 2 remained unchanged but in 2024, the Path was shortened for the connection with two school building.
Turning to the other features, we can see that sport side in northeast was moved to the southeast and was narrowed in 2024. Also, its old location was replaced by a new school building. Besides, the forest was sightly smaller for a new a car park next to the school building 3. A Road was constructed from west to east to merge the main entrance with the other buildings from north to south.

Votes
Average: 7.5 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...the layout of school as it was 2004 with a proposed site design in 2024. Overall...
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Line 2, column 78, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
...iderable changes during the period shown . The most noticeable differences between...
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Line 4, column 392, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...he other buildings from north to south.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 748.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 160.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.675 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65903805761 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59375 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 211.5 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0156211872 43.030603864 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.23603664747 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293371054594 0.215688989381 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14334206399 0.103423049105 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111228001289 0.0843802449381 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215861323737 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809228680169 0.0819641961636 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 61.2550243902 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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