The graph shows the changes of overweight rates in 9 different countries and also give prediction of 2020

Essay topics:

The graph shows the changes of overweight rates in 9 different countries and also give prediction of 2020.

A glance at the line diagram provided compares the changes of overweight rates from 1970 to recent year, and also predicted about future year of 2020, of nine different nations.

Increasing from 45% in the year of 1972, in the USA, to 73% by 2019 and it is predicted up to 75% in the year of 2020. In stark contrast, Korea had no any proportion of overweight until the year of 1999, by the following year, this nation has mere 15% of overweight and reached at hardly 32% in the year of 2019, which is minimum value among all the given countries.

Moreover, the nations Canada and Spain had similar trend, however, after the 2009, Spain crossed the proportion of Canada and increased slightly through out the remaining years. Same trend also seem in Italy and France. Australia shows the gradually increasing trend in given all years. However in the year of 2010, it seemed slightly decreased but followed by year, it increased again. Also, in the future, it will show upward trend and will pick around 42%. Similarly, England had also same trend but value of proportion is high as compared to Australia.

Overall, it can be seen that, Australia has highest percentage of overweight in the past as well as future, where as Korea has least proportion among all the countries through out the years.

Votes
Average: 7.9 (10 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...r of 2020. In stark contrast, Korea had no any proportion of overweight until the ...
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Suggestion: throughout
...ortion of Canada and increased slightly through out the remaining years. Same trend also se...
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...ly increasing trend in given all years. However in the year of 2010, it seemed slightly...
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...east proportion among all the countries through out the years.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, similarly, so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1084.0 965.302439024 112% => OK
No of words: 227.0 196.424390244 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77533039648 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44951351074 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 106.607317073 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541850220264 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 306.0 283.868780488 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7057413639 43.030603864 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.4 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.23603664747 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193775304868 0.215688989381 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759451537417 0.103423049105 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758076837999 0.0843802449381 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127645185182 0.15604864568 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0907455189041 0.0819641961636 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 61.2550243902 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.4329268293 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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