the graph shows the consumtion of fish and some diferent kinds of meat in a Eropean country between 1979 and 2004

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the graph shows the consumtion of fish and some diferent kinds of meat in a Eropean country between 1979 and 2004.

The line graph compares the rate of visiter to England who traveled to four distinct kinds of atractive destinations in Brighton from 1980 to 2010
In general, it is clear that the promotion of traveller visit to Art Gallerry and Pier tended to increase during the research period, while the percentage of visiter to two remainder place decreased.
In 1980, only 10% of tourists to England went to Art Gallery and 5 years later fluctuating decreased at 9%. However, after 1990 this figure rose considerately and finished at around 22% in 2004. During 30-year research period, it witnessed a dramatically fluctuation to the rate of visitor to Pavilion. From starting above 20% in 1980, this figure reached a peak at 38% in 1985. Despise that the Pavilion’s traveler declined significantly throughout 25-year later at approximate 7% in 2004.
Although the most attraction destination in Brighton for visitor to England in 1980 was Festival at 30%, by 2010 this percentage declined minimally at 28%. The figure for visitors traveling to Pier was approximate 22%. After that this increased peak of about 48% in 1995. Then the rate of tourisms of Festival fell to just over 30%. This was the most commonly of destination in Brighton at the end of the research period.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 240, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('dramatically') instead an adjective, or a noun ('fluctuation') instead of another adjective.
...g 30-year research period, it witnessed a dramatically fluctuation to the rate of visitor to Pavilion. Fro...
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Line 4, column 219, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... traveling to Pier was approximate 22%. After that this increased peak of about 48% i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, then, while, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 33.7804878049 160% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1066.0 965.302439024 110% => OK
No of words: 212.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02830188679 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83502731036 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561320754717 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 309.6 283.868780488 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 78.920924961 43.030603864 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9090909091 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2727272727 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.27272727273 5.23603664747 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0321673030545 0.215688989381 15% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.011676096539 0.103423049105 11% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0190723194047 0.0843802449381 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0257945958025 0.15604864568 17% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299106754727 0.0819641961636 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 40.7170731707 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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