The graph shows percentage of adults having obesity in England since 1994 by sex

Essay topics:

The graph shows percentage of adults having obesity in England since 1994 by sex.

The given line graph provides the information about the portion of England’s population with obesity by gender since 1994.

The main observed trend is the increase in percentage among both groups with more females in the beginnig and more male in the end of the period.

The relative amount of women stood at approximately seventeen and a half in 1994, then it remained steady for one year. Later the graduate rise is observed until 1998 changed to a leveled off till behaviour 2000. After that the portion of females fluctuated hitting two peaks in 2001 with 23 percent and in 2005 with 26 percent. Then it skyrocketed to 30 percent at the end of observed period.

The portion of men started at 14 percent with moderate inc rease until hitting females percentage in 2000 with 21 percent. Then it kept the level for one year, later it experienced a slight growth overcomming women rate in 2004, after which the sharp rise is observed reaching 30 percent in present.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... more male in the end of the period. The relative amount of women stood at appro...
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Line 5, column 69, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'half' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'halves'.
Suggestion: halves
... stood at approximately seventeen and a half in 1994, then it remained steady for on...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 810.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82142857143 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5236901926 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 238.5 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0762670699 43.030603864 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.25 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 5.23603664747 10% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0975196920511 0.215688989381 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0486721284182 0.103423049105 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862242015686 0.0843802449381 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0887601008131 0.15604864568 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105810639106 0.0819641961636 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.2329268293 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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