The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in severalemployment sectors of the republic of Freedonia.Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.You should write at least 150 words.You should

Essay topics:

The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several
employment sectors of the republic of Freedonia.

Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.

You should write at least 150 words.
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph shows by sex in six sectors the employment in Freedonia between 1975 and 1995. As we can find huge changes appear in communication field, finance, banking, wholesales and retail trade. As women number of employment increased as we can see in 1975 was almost 300,000 employee and by 1995 reached almost 600,000 employee in communication field.

In the other hand we can find men side don't change as women, as men in most of sectors in the same level without change of the employment as that appear in communication, wholesale, retail trade and public sector [non-defence].

Moreover we can find saml increasing from men in finance and banking as that was almost 400,000 employee in 1975 and by 1995 raised to be almost 500,000 employee, in public sector [Defence] exceeded 200,000 employee in 1995 after that was 200,000 employee in 1975.

Overall, we can find generally that women make a huge difference in a lot of sectors in employment instead of men as them change was so small and in most of sectors keep the same level of employment.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 40, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... In the other hand we can find men side dont change as women, as men in most of sect...
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Line 3, column 72, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the sectors') or simply say ''most sectors''.
Suggestion: most of the sectors; most sectors
...en side dont change as women, as men in most of sectors in the same level without change of the...
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Line 3, column 199, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mmunication, wholesale, retail trade and public sector [non-defence]. Moreover...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...de and public sector [non-defence]. Moreover we can find saml increasing from men in...
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Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the sectors') or simply say ''most sectors''.
Suggestion: most of the sectors; most sectors
... men as them change was so small and in most of sectors keep the same level of employment.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.97073170732 302% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 877.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 181.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8453038674 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72410989162 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 88.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486187845304 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 243.9 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.358109189 43.030603864 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.166666667 112.824112599 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1666666667 22.9334400587 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 5.23603664747 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0887113451742 0.215688989381 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636088322425 0.103423049105 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660870420801 0.0843802449381 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0580129937349 0.15604864568 37% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030836695527 0.0819641961636 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.2329268293 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.41 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 40.7170731707 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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