The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

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The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The given graphs illustrate three kinds of music albums, pop music, rock music, and classical music, that are purchased by English people in the U.K.
Overall, it is clear that men are always interested in music than women. Moreover, the old people are less interested in pop and rock music than classical music.
The percentage of men buying pop music, just under 30%, is higher 10% than the percentage of women buying the one. Besides, the proportion of men purchasing rock albums, just above 30%, is twice the proportion of women purchasing the ones. However, the percentages of both male and female people significantly decrease. The percentage of male people, approximately 10%, is just above the percentage of female people, regarding classical albums purchased.
Moreover, surprisingly, the percentages of people, in 16-24 group, 25-34 group, and 35-44 group, buying pop, at 30%, just above 30%, and approximately 15%, is nearly the same the percentages of the same group people buying rock albums. However, there is a dramatic decrease in people buying classical music, in teenagers and 35-44 group. Moreover, the percentage of 25-34 group of people purchasing this type of music is just under the percentage of 45 plus group of people buying this type of music, which is at 20%.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, moreover, regarding

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1082.0 965.302439024 112% => OK
No of words: 211.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12796208531 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69569526904 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412322274882 0.547539520022 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 318.6 283.868780488 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.410874004 43.030603864 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.222222222 112.824112599 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4444444444 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130563778169 0.215688989381 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698247913945 0.103423049105 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501298200308 0.0843802449381 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102907867544 0.15604864568 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458409556216 0.0819641961636 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 11.4140731707 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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