The line graph shows estimated sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of DurhamssWrite a report describing the information in the graph below.The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 an

Essay topics:

The line graph shows estimated sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of DurhamssWrite a report describing the information in the graph below.The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparsions where relevant.

The line graph shows estimated sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions o

The liner and circular chart reveals that information about representation sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in million of Dirhams through second pie chart show the online shopping sales for retail sector in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Firstly,it is clearly see about in 2002 was million of dirhams in 200 January. Therefore,Dubai gold sales was rise in february middle 350 millions as well as gold sales had stuck in April,May,June and July in 150-200 millions.Moreover,in august was nearly climb up million.

Secondly,in 2005 video games was fall up to 18 proportion instead of in 2010 it had little bit increase 23 % video games.As far as electronic &appliances was high percentage but 2010 it was five percentage rose electronics& appliances.otherwise,
in home and food &beverage was upsurge than in 2010 there was fall down to 10%.

To sum up,gold sales was highest proportion in February 350 millions of dirhams.Thus,in 201one thing was popular in video games all things was decrease in 2010.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, may, moreover, second, secondly, therefore, thus, well, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 928.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 184.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04347826087 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20960028141 2.65546596893 121% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58152173913 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 260.1 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 22.4926829268 160% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.1031785565 43.030603864 230% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 185.6 112.824112599 165% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.8 22.9334400587 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 19.6 5.23603664747 374% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 20.0 1.69756097561 1178% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301572926607 0.215688989381 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179311212989 0.103423049105 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.239247859443 0.0843802449381 284% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215364271565 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.239967298905 0.0819641961636 293% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.7 13.2329268293 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.86 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.9970731707 149% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.0658536585 190% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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