The line graph shows the percentage of the uses of five modern technological devices (CD, DVD, Computers, mobile Phones and internet) from 1997 to 2001 in the UK.

Essay topics:

The line graph shows the percentage of the uses of five modern technological devices (CD, DVD, Computers, mobile Phones and internet) from 1997 to 2001 in the UK.

The line chart represents the percentage of the use of computers, mobile phones, CDs, the internet and DVDs in the UK for a period between 1997 and 2001.

In 1997, 60% of DVDs used in the UK, and this figure fell before rising <wdautohl-customtag style="font-weight:bold;color:red;font-size:inherit;display:inline;" id="wdautohl_id_3" class="wdautohl_c3RlZXBseQ__">steeply</wdautohl-customtag> to reach a peak of approximately 80% in 1998. From then on, it decreased significantly to a level of about 10% in 2001.

The percentage of CD users were 50% in the UK in 1997 which mean that the growth in this category was constant over the period. Mobile phones were used in 1997, in the UK with the beginning at 40%, and this figure climbed <wdautohl-customtag style="font-weight:bold;color:red;font-size:inherit;display:inline;" id="wdautohl_id_4" class="wdautohl_c3dpZnRseQ__">swiftly</wdautohl-customtag> progressing in the next 5 years and <wdautohl-customtag style="font-weight:bold;color:red;font-size:inherit;display:inline;" id="wdautohl_id_5" class="wdautohl_dHJhdmVyc2U_">traversed</wdautohl-customtag> to 80% by 2001. On the other hand, using computer accounted for 20% in 1997, although this category also <wdautohl-customtag style="font-weight:bold;color:red;font-size:inherit;display:inline;" id="wdautohl_id_6" class="wdautohl_aW5jcmVtZW50ZWQ_">incremented</wdautohl-customtag> dramatically, rising from about 20% to around 90% during the period. <wdautohl-customtag style="font-weight:bold;color:blue;font-size:inherit;display:inline;" id="wdautohl_id_7" class="wdautohl_aW4gdGhlIG1lYW50aW1l">In the meantime</wdautohl-customtag>, the proportion of the usage of the internet was 10% in 1997 which is gradually increased and reached 40% in 2001.

Overall, Most of the users choice computer rather than other technological <wdautohl-customtag style="font-weight:bold;color:red;font-size:inherit;display:inline;" id="wdautohl_id_8" class="wdautohl_Z2FkZ2V0">gadgets</wdautohl-customtag>. This category experienced a sharp growth from 1997 to 2001, whereas there was a continuing upward trend in the using of other devices expect CDs and DVDs.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...for a period between 1997 and 2001. In 1997, 60% of DVDs used in the UK, and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, whereas, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 965.302439024 219% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 231.0 196.424390244 118% => OK
Chars per words: 9.14285714286 4.92477711251 186% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 15.768816456 2.65546596893 594% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 124.0 106.607317073 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536796536797 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 283.868780488 184% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.3 1.45097560976 159% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 138.350422862 43.030603864 322% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 234.666666667 112.824112599 208% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 22.9334400587 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.23603664747 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0970423777295 0.215688989381 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972329924271 0.103423049105 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095768622726 0.0843802449381 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133821326273 0.15604864568 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117436410174 0.0819641961636 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.5 13.2329268293 261% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -13.12 61.2550243902 -21% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.3 10.3012195122 207% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 36.03 11.4140731707 316% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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