The line paragraphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.

Essay topics:

The line paragraphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.

The two line graphs give information about the amount of steel manufactured and demanded in million tonnes as well as the number of employees working in the UK steel industry in 2010.
Generally speaking, demand and production of steel suffered mixed fortunes throughout the year. The amount manufactured almost always surpassed the amount demanded; however, the production index fell dramatically while the need fluctuated jaggedly. In addition, the number of workers experienced the same pattern as the production did.
Regarding demand and manufacture, production of steel began at 4000 (million tonnes) in January, with respect to the demand being exactly the half of that, then reached its peak at 5000, which was the highest number achieved in the whole period. From there, it dropped back to the starting point in March and maintained this level until around July with the amount needed also remain approximately 1000 less. Afterward, it plummeted in August and so did the demand; however, despite the promising start, it ended up lower than 1000 at the end of 2010. By contrast, although the demand witnessed a sawtooth outline during the year, it still ended up around the beginning point and therefore exceeded the supply by around 1000.
Moving onto the numbers of workers, there were 5000 people working in the steel industry at the beginning of the year. The figure then reached the peak of above 5500 then declined significantly to 3000. From that time onward, the employee number showed some fluctuations and in August, the UK steel sector employed around 3.5 million workers. However, in the rest of the year, the figure continued decreasing to the nadir of 1000 people.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, regarding, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, in addition, as well as, with respect to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 33.7804878049 151% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 965.302439024 147% => OK
No of words: 275.0 196.424390244 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14545454545 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60508339677 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 106.607317073 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563636363636 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 283.868780488 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6085396487 43.030603864 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.916666667 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9166666667 22.9334400587 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.23603664747 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345656365384 0.215688989381 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120123412441 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123271279985 0.0843802449381 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232820839918 0.15604864568 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110233961314 0.0819641961636 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.2329268293 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.06136585366 110% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 40.7170731707 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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