The line paragraphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.

Essay topics:

The line paragraphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.

The two line graphs give information about the amount of steel manufactured and demanded in million tonnes as well as the number of employees working in the UK steel industry in 2010.
Generally speaking, the amount manufactured almost always surpassed the amount demanded; however, the production index fell dramatically while the need fluctuated jaggedly. In addition, the number of workers experienced the same pattern as the production did.
Initially, the demand of steel began at 4000 (million tonnes) in January with the demand being exactly the half of that, then reached its peak at 5000, which was the highest number achieved in the whole period. From there, it dropped back to the starting point in March and maintained this level until around July with the need remain approximately 1000 less. Despite the promising start, it ended up lower than 1000 at the end of 2010. By contrast, although the demand witnessed a sawtooth outline during the year, it still ended up around the beginning point and therefore exceeded the supply by around 1000.
Moving onto the numbers of workers, there were 5000 people working in the steel industry at the beginning of the year. The figure then reached the peak of above 5500 then declined significantly to 3000. From that time onward, the employee number showed some fluctuations and in August, the UK steel sector employed around 3.5 million workers. However, in the rest of the year, the figure continued decreasing to the nadir of 1000 people.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
...t of steel manufactured and demanded in million tonnes as well as the number of employe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, in addition, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1256.0 965.302439024 130% => OK
No of words: 247.0 196.424390244 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08502024291 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54885229771 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 106.607317073 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570850202429 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 362.7 283.868780488 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8848982854 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.181818182 112.824112599 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4545454545 22.9334400587 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324528820031 0.215688989381 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111432635481 0.103423049105 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127851059563 0.0843802449381 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207452547647 0.15604864568 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128888059678 0.0819641961636 157% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 40.7170731707 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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