Many people hold a view that children should be taught to be part community by their parents, while others would argue that it is better for them to learn this at school.

Essay topics:

Many people hold a view that children should be taught to be part community by their parents, while others would argue that it is better for them to learn this at school.

Many people hold a view that children should be taught to be part community by their parents, while others would argue that it is better for them to learn this at school.
On the one hand, parents have always set an example on behaviors for their children , as children learn through imitating parents. Parents have raised children up since they were born and been closest to them, so children manners are good reflection of their parents.
On the other hand, some people think that children should learn this at school. As school is an example of a society, it is better to learn in realistic situations. Moreover, teachers and especially schoolmates really make a huge impact on how a child behaves towards others as well as his parents do, because many children think that teachers and friends are always right.
In my opinion, other home and school affect a child’s behaviors, as both are the places where he spends the most of his childhood in and that is the time when his characters are shaped. He doesn’t know what is right or wrong, the only thing he knows is to observe people around him and act like them. If parents, teachers and friends can form good members of the community, so will this child.
In conclusion, I believe that parents and teachers should give children lessons on how to be a good person, as well as children should be in an environment in which everyone around them have positive influences on them.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 84, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, really, so, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 5.60731707317 517% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1196.0 965.302439024 124% => OK
No of words: 252.0 196.424390244 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74603174603 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49035070127 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 106.607317073 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543650793651 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 344.7 283.868780488 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 1.07073170732 654% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8979549675 43.030603864 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.6 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8 5.23603664747 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.513809071757 0.215688989381 238% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.214644680392 0.103423049105 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.274803617224 0.0843802449381 326% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.339177167954 0.15604864568 217% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.334391254743 0.0819641961636 408% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.2329268293 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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