The map below compared 2 floor plans of one trade conference held in 2009 and 2010

Essay topics:

The map below compared 2 floor plans of one trade conference held in 2009 and 2010.

Submitted by nhinhi999 on Tue, 08/02/2022 - 13:51

the maps illustrate the 2-floor scheme of one trade meeting organization in 2009 and 2010. It can be clearly seen that, although more expensive, the trade conference witnessed several changes with the most noticeable being the replacement of the concert hall and a meeting room to make room for the exhibition area.

As can be seen in the diagram, there was the main entrance and side entrance in the northwest and northeast corner of the floor, between which was a registration area. the exhibition was expanded and moved to the southwest. The meeting room and display area were demolished.

Looking at the diagram in more detail, the concert hall was relocated in the southeast with a stage and a number of seats. The balcony on the right-hand side was equipped with lounge area in 2010 while the registration was built to the southeast of the corner. the registration was opposite the exhibition area.

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Average: 6.1 (2 votes)
Essay Categories
IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
the maps illustrate the 2-floor scheme of o...
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Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... between which was a registration area. the exhibition was expanded and moved to th...
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Line 5, column 262, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...s built to the southeast of the corner. the registration was opposite the exhibitio...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.97073170732 277% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 760.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 153.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96732026144 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51700396316 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74817754438 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 227.7 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.858808814 43.030603864 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.875 5.23603664747 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125094328267 0.215688989381 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666607733836 0.103423049105 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129181185224 0.0843802449381 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930960719497 0.15604864568 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0989151032642 0.0819641961636 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
the maps illustrate the 2-floor scheme of o...
^^^
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... between which was a registration area. the exhibition was expanded and moved to th...
^^^
Line 5, column 262, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...s built to the southeast of the corner. the registration was opposite the exhibitio...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.97073170732 277% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 760.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 153.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96732026144 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51700396316 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74817754438 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 227.7 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.858808814 43.030603864 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.875 5.23603664747 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125094328267 0.215688989381 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666607733836 0.103423049105 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129181185224 0.0843802449381 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930960719497 0.15604864568 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0989151032642 0.0819641961636 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.