The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map presents information about a town called Garlsdon, where there are two plans for the location of a new supermarket, in order to provide better service for the 6,500 people in the town. As is shown, the locationin plan A is in the northwest countryside of the town, while plan B locates the site in the middle of town centre.
It can be seen that both of the sites are along the railway which goes through the whole town, making it convenient to transport and travel. The most advantage of plan A lies in the lower cost of land in the countryside and short distance from town of Hindon with population of 10,000.
Compared with plan A, plan B is superior in the following aspects:being closer to housing and two industry zones, measuring similar distance to the thress surrounding towns of Hindon, Bransdon and Cransdon. Also, three main roads joint in this area, which could attract a lot of traffic and business.
In summary, despite the higher cost in the town center, the site of plan B will bring in much more profit and convenience to more citizens.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nformation about a town called Garlsdon, where there are two plans for the locati...
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...s for the location of a new supermarket, in order to provide better service for t...
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...e 6,500 people in the town. As is shown, the locationin plan A is in the northwes...
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...n the northwest countryside of the town, while plan B locates the site in the mid...
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... and travel. The most advantage of plan A lies in the lower cost of land in the countr...
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...lation of 10,000. Compared with plan A, plan B is superior in the following aspe...
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...loser to housing and two industry zones, measuring similar distance to the thress...
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... the thress surrounding towns of Hindon, Bransdon and Cransdon. Also, three main...
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...of Hindon, Bransdon and Cransdon. Also, three main roads joint in this area, wh...
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...o, three main roads joint in this area, which could attract a lot of traffic and...
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...ot of traffic and business. In summary, despite the higher cost in the town cent...
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...pite the higher cost in the town center, the site of plan B will bring in much mo...
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...e site of plan B will bring in much more profit and convenience to more citizens....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, while, in summary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 877.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64021164021 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5748338982 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597883597884 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 258.3 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.2356498508 43.030603864 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.285714286 112.824112599 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 22.9334400587 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.23603664747 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 1.69756097561 766% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34453507654 0.215688989381 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143348050259 0.103423049105 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130515756049 0.0843802449381 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181825976628 0.15604864568 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14204818309 0.0819641961636 173% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.2329268293 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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