Nowadays people live longer, so should people remain in the workforce for a longer time. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Essay topics:

Nowadays people live longer, so should people remain in the workforce for a longer time. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Currently people are living more which raises the question that people ought to spend more time in their jobs or not? While I believe that spending more time in jobs is far beneficial for old people who eventually keep them fit and active which is essential of their lives.

To begin with, I would like to outline the advantages of long time work employment in job tuner. Some people believes that currently people are living longer comparatively past that ultimately would help the people to extend retirement age for the job. Furthermore, many people says, at the time of retirement oldest people need to engage their lives with several activities that will definitely keeps their lives save and healthy. Along with this, In many cases it has seen that oldest people are bearing household expenses due to unavailability of offspring or family members which shows the capability of old men who is still working. On the other hand, many old people are only taking rest and food that's the sign of detrimental health effects for their lives.

There is no denying that hard work always keeps the health fit and energetic of individual’s lives that eventually will help to people spend better life in future. Many adepts assert that old people who are not involved in any activity whether it's employment or something else for instance, sports, household works and many others, they will have to face many obstacles in shape of diseases to some extent. In addition, number of people do not allow to their parents to do job at their retirement time on account of their health sensitivity, but, they spend more and more time with their parents to make them fit such as, spending time in ground, Gym, gaming zone and others.

In conclusion, It is better to go for the work instead of wasting time at home. There are many adverse consequences if the old people are not engaged in activities, therefore, in order to make better life people need to do hard work whether it’s a job or something else.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...y will help to people spend better life in future. Many adepts assert that old people who...
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...ther it's a job or something else.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in many cases, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 3.15609756098 475% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 5.60731707317 517% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 33.7804878049 142% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 965.302439024 172% => OK
No of words: 345.0 196.424390244 176% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82608695652 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 3.73543355544 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51841193131 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 106.607317073 159% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489855072464 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 528.3 283.868780488 186% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.3113452441 43.030603864 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.75 112.824112599 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.75 22.9334400587 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4166666667 5.23603664747 237% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256468828817 0.215688989381 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113554586515 0.103423049105 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668073454544 0.0843802449381 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173975139629 0.15604864568 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398954336115 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 40.7170731707 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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