Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Currently, due to the impressive development of technology, people can be monitored in everywhere for any purposes without any notice. Although I agree that there are benefit of this development, I believe that there are more serious drawbacks.
It seems positive that hidden monitor equipments can be very helpful when crimes happen in that spaces. Becuase, detectors and police can catch the criminals by using them. For instance, if the crime scene was recorded by security cameras, the figure of criminal could be checked and it might give some advantages to police.
However, it can be used to support criminals and actually in the reality that happens all the time nowdays. There are so many cases that sexual criminals put micro-camera in public toilet of women and record the whole situations happened in stalls. There is also another case of abusing monitor equipments. By using cellphone tracking, criminals can take private informations of people and then use them to take tons of money off from them.
Besides, monitoring people can also invade private and human's right in work place. Especially in Korea, employers monitor their employees without any notice and tease their workers when they try to take a break time because the employers just want employees to work only. That take away human's right from workers, which is to be guaranted.
For the reasons mentioned above, I would argue that the drawbacks of technology development about monitoring people outweigh its benefits because there are so many possibilities to be used in the wrong way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, however, if, so, then, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 22.0 5.60731707317 392% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1319.0 965.302439024 137% => OK
No of words: 255.0 196.424390244 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17254901961 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65457466051 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 106.607317073 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596078431373 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 283.868780488 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.0573859238 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.461538462 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6153846154 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 5.23603664747 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 1.13902439024 702% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24874484011 0.215688989381 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0852748948154 0.103423049105 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515552930346 0.0843802449381 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143661980883 0.15604864568 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038743431211 0.0819641961636 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 61.2550243902 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 40.7170731707 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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