The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

Essay topics:

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

The given diagrams compares the percentage of participants in different cultural and leisure activities between two genders.
It is clearly that both males and females participate in three activities: listening to music, reading and playing computer games. In addition, there are differences in types of activities between both sexes.

As is presented in the pie charts, while 21% of girls' hobbies is reading, only 2% goes to male readers. Playing video games is a popular activity of boys occupying with 34%. This figure is twice as large as that of girls with 16%. Noticeably, there is a same proportion of boys and girls enjoying listening to music with 10%.

In terms of boys' activities, outdoor activities are more preferable. Approximately a quarter of boys keen on playing basketball, followed by those who playing football and skateboarding with 17% and 11% respectively. In contrast, girls prefer fitness sports ( dancing, gymnastics and netball). Dancing made up the largest share of total with 27%. Similarly, girls are more interested in netball after dancing with 15%. At the same time, 11% belongs to those enjoying gymnastics.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 258, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...In contrast, girls prefer fitness sports dancing, gymnastics and netball. Dancing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, similarly, while, in addition, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 964.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2967032967 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90448936081 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631868131868 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 285.3 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.4817163278 43.030603864 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.1538461538 112.824112599 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 22.9334400587 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53846153846 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143829830445 0.215688989381 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525606740768 0.103423049105 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429074030808 0.0843802449381 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0938913092141 0.15604864568 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251151770277 0.0819641961636 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 61.2550243902 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.3012195122 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 40.7170731707 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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