The plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plants illustrate two layouts of a university's sports center, before and after redevelopment.

At the moment, there is a building which contains a pool with a seating area and a changing room. Behind the pool, there is a gym. The reception desk situated in front of the pool and against the entrance. Also, there are two outdoor courts beside the left and right of the pool building.

According to the future plan, location of the pool, the reception, seating area, changing room and gym will be the same. However, the gym area will expanded two times wider. There will be a leisure pool and a changing room in the left of the pool building, where there is a outdoor courts now. Furthermore, the right outdoor courts will be distructed too and a sports hall and two dance studios will be constructed there. Additionally, to left and right of the entrance will be built a sports shop and a cafe.

To sum up, the university sports center will be changed hugly. Especially, in the new layout, there is not any outdoor area and sports center will be surrounded by walls and there will be a big building instead a building and outdoor areas.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 38, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
The plants illustrate two layouts of a universitys sports center, before and a...
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Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'expand'
Suggestion: expand
...be the same. However, the gym area will expanded two times wider. There will be a leisur...
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Line 5, column 273, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ft of the pool building, where there is a outdoor courts now. Furthermore, the ri...
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Line 5, column 362, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...oor courts will be distructed too and a sports hall and two dance studios will be cons...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, so, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 947.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 203.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66502463054 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56585470679 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467980295567 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 278.1 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1053305545 43.030603864 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.9166666667 112.824112599 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9166666667 22.9334400587 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41666666667 5.23603664747 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.09268292683 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158056762934 0.215688989381 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707344272341 0.103423049105 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727072203512 0.0843802449381 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129173162563 0.15604864568 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0897838303333 0.0819641961636 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.2329268293 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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