The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Elmi on Mon, 09/03/2018 - 18:13

According to the given maps, it illustrates the layout of the sports centre of a university before reconstruction and how it will look after it has been renovated partially.

To start with, it is clear the university has approximately 25 meter pool, which is surrounded by a Changing Room, Gym, Seating area and a Reception at the entrance of the sports centre. It also has two outdoor courts on both west and east sides of the sports centre.

Furthermore, the future plan is to destroy the outdoor courts and replace them with more suitable facilities like, Leisure Pool, Changing Room and a Sports shop on the west side, and on the east side, there is going be a Sports Hall, two small Dance Studios, a Changing Room and a Café.

To sum up, the university sports centre will seem bigger then it is now, even though the Changing Room, Gym, Seating area and Reception that surrounded the mail pool will not be vandalised. The sports centre will have three Changing Rooms instead of one, two dance studios, the Gym is going be bigger, there will be a Café, a Sports shop as well as a Sports Hall. In addition to that, there is going to be two swimming pools, that is, the main pool and an even bigger Leisure Pool.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, look, so, then, well, in addition, as well as, to start with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1005.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 220.0 196.424390244 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56818181818 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45778826193 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 106.607317073 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495454545455 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 291.6 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.0040814938 43.030603864 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.571428571 112.824112599 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.4285714286 22.9334400587 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8571428571 5.23603664747 246% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173741557714 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958696865885 0.103423049105 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752089954692 0.0843802449381 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124160385002 0.15604864568 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809440003279 0.0819641961636 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.39 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.82 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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