Please help me review my WRITING TASK 1 IELTS

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Please help me review my WRITING TASK 1 IELTS

The given table illustrates the percentages of worldwide mobile phone sales in the years 2005 and 2006. It can be seen that there was a downward trend in most of the companies with the exception of Nokia, Motorola, and Sony Ericsson. Additionally, Nokia accounted for the highest figure during the period shown.
Looking at the graph in more detail, in 2005, there was 32,5% of the market share in Nokia manufacture, which was nearly double the figure in Motorola (17,7%). Then both companies saw a small increase to 35% and 21,1% in 2006 respectively. Similarly, Sony Ericsson occupied only 6,3% of the market share in 2005 before slightly rising to 7,4% one year later.
Moving onto Samsung, this company underwent a slight decrease in sales from 12,7% to 11,8% after a year. Meanwhile, the figures in BenQ mobile and LG companies were tiny in 2005, ranging from 4,9% to 6,7% before falling to 2,4% and 6,3% consequently. Other companies remain the second place, at 19,2% (2005) and 16,2% (2006).

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