The table below shows the hours of leisure time spent by people in different age groups in Someland.Link : https://www.ielts-exam.net/academic_writing_samples_task_1/104/This is an IELTS Task 1 -please help me correct it .

The tabular chart represents the number of hours of free time exhausted by the home sapiens of distinct age categories per year in the someland. Overall, it is palpable from the table chart that the teenager spent a higher free time on the activities as compared to the other age groups. Whereas, the senior people did not take a focus to spend a leisure time on the age group sport activity rather than the adults group. At the first glance, it is clearly seen that there was a slightly distinct between the leisure time which spent over the watching television by the children and senior group of 70 years nearly by 100 hours. Eventually, the other age groups exhausted the free time on this activity by taking approximately 700 hours. Moreover, the age group of 30 years used their higher leisure time such as 300 hours to watch socialising with at least 4 people as compared to others. Apart from this, the coeval situation is arises on the leisure time utilisation for the socialising with over 5 mankinds between the all age classification. Adventing further, in the individual exercise and group sport, the higher hours of spare time such as 200 utilized by the age of adults groups means 30-40 years and the least amount spent by the old persons of the 60-70 years groups on the above second activity such as zero hours . Surprisingly, 20 and 70 age groups of people exhausted the leisure time approximately 75 hours on the cinema.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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...pared to the other age groups. Whereas, the senior people did not take a focus t...
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... activity rather than the adults group. At the first glance, it is clearly seen...
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...which spent over the watching television by the children and senior group of 70 y...
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...0 years nearly by 100 hours. Eventually, the other age groups exhausted the free ...
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...aking approximately 700 hours. Moreover, the age group of 30 years used their hig...
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...as compared to others. Apart from this, the coeval situation is arises on the le...
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...nds between the all age classification. Adventing further, in the individual ex...
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...the individual exercise and group sport, the higher hours of spare time such as 2...
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...e higher hours of spare time such as 200 utilized by the age of adults groups mea...
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...nt by the old persons of the 60-70 years groups on the above second activity such...
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...above second activity such as zero hours . Surprisingly, 20 and 70 age groups o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, so, whereas, apart from, at least, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1187.0 965.302439024 123% => OK
No of words: 252.0 196.424390244 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71031746032 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55528017938 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 106.607317073 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496031746032 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 361.8 283.868780488 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.2397133828 43.030603864 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.888888889 112.824112599 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 22.9334400587 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88888888889 5.23603664747 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 3.83414634146 26% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 1.69756097561 1237% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218490492261 0.215688989381 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11194747962 0.103423049105 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0271610176485 0.0843802449381 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218490492261 0.15604864568 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.2329268293 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum two paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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